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Many think that governments should limit the number of cars each household can own to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a view that the
government
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 should limit the
number
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 of vehicles per family to solve some global problems.
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 I believe that if the
government
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 restricts the
number
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 of
cars
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, pollution levels will decrease.There is another alternative which is
also
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 possible to use. It is
cars
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 that emit carbon emissions into the atmosphere and have a negative effect on our lives. Because of
it is
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 affordability, most of the
cars
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 in our country are on fuel or gas.
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 of the country relying on specific sources for vehicles,
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overall
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 air quality is poor.
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, these days Uzbekistan is considered as most polluted country in the world.
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,if the
government
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 reduces the
number
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 of transport options that each household can own,
overall
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 air pollution will drop. What many people overlook is that electric
cars
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 can replace
cars
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 on fuel or gas. Vehicles which use energy are absolutely safe for nature. Electric
cars
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 have no harmful effect on the environment, which means they are the best choice for large cities
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 families can own more than one vehicle.
This
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 approach works for big families and crowded countries. In conclusion, reducing the
number
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 of
cars
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 in polluted cities will tackle the problem
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 carbon emissions,
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 it is
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 possible for the
government
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 to encourage society to use electric
cars
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,which are eco-friendly.

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coherence
Plan your answer. State your view in the first paragraph, give 2 or 3 reasons, and finish with a short end.
coherence
Make one main idea in each paragraph and use small words to connect ideas; use words like first, also, then, but, for example, so.
task
Use one or two clear examples to back each reason; check facts you use.
content
You show a view that the government should act.
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You bring in the idea of electric cars as a possible solution.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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