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With the rise of personalized technology and social media algorithms, some believe individuals now live in filter bubbles, limiting their exposure to diverse perspectives. To what extent do you agree that these filter bubbles pose a threat to informed decision-making and societal progress? What measures can be taken to mitigate this effect?

In the technology era, some people claim that individuals are living in social
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 filter bubbles and have less exposure to various points of view
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 the increase in social
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 marketing schemes. I concur that these filter bubbles
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 significant threats, but they can be alleviated by taking some
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 measures. The first vital menace is related to
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 and limited interaction. Social
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 algorithms expose
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 to only one point of view,
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 other perspectives disappear. It leads to a division of social and political views.
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, limited interactions with different cultures, backgrounds, and opinions lead to a decrease in understanding. The second threat is the erosion of critical thinking. As it diminishes the ability to evaluate
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, consider multiple points, and reach a proper decision. The prime example is
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 of TikTok. Mostly, false
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 circulates on social
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 platforms, and
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 are not capable of evaluating the misinformation. There are diverse measurements that should be taken to diminish these threats. First is the promotion of
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 literacy in educational institutions to develop evaluation skills. These skills can help individuals evaluate online
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 and foster critical thinking by
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 and questioning the
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 sources. The second measure is related to technology providers; some functions of social
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 must be under the user's control. If some features can be controlled by
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, they can get exposure to diverse content and can modify content with greater transparency. In conclusion, there are some strong threats associated with social progress and the ability of an individual to make decisions, but it can be diminished by learning
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 evaluation skills and how to control some functions for the selection of content.

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planning
Plan a view in two parts: say your view, then give why it is true and how to fix. Use one idea per paragraph and give one clear example.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, for example to show how ideas go
examples
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grammar
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lexis
Use light, clear words. Keep phrases short and easy to read.
content
The writer shows a clear view and uses a possible solution.
development
There is a good attempt to give steps to solve the problem.
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