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Band 2

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? give reason for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowladge or experient

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Introduction
Many
people
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 believe that in the future, nobody will buy
printed
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a printed
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 newspaper because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.
People
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 who
love
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 books not just
love
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 to read but
also
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love
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 the
book
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 they
touched
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touch
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.
Body paragraph 1
The fact is, in the future the technology will develop rapidly, one of the
result
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results
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 is
everything
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that everything
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 will change to online.
Expecially
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Especially
people
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 who
love
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 reading a
book
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 with
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a physically
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physically
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physical
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book
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 will transform to reading online, since now there are many
application
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applications
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 or
innovation
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innovations
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 that make
a
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apply
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technology like a gadget
but
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, but
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 only to read a
book
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like
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, like
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kindle
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Kindle
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 and
iboox
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iBooks
.
That’s
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That
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make
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makes
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easier
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it easier
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people
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for people
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 who like reading.
Body paragraph 2
Linking Words
However
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However,
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people
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 who
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are addict
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addict
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addicted
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or
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to or
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love
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read
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reading
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 sometimes not just about the story or just
a
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apply
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words
in
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apply
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the inside
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inside the
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book
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, but when they
touched
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touch
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 the paper, they can
touched
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touch
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 the cover with their hands, and put it into their library or part of their homes
It’s
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. It’s
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 will feel
diffrents
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different
.
Conclusion
The conclusion is, just because technology will
improved
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improve
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, it doesn’t make
people
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 who
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are addict
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addict
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addicted
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with reads
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to reading
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 and books will just read
it
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them
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in
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apply
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online and not
buying
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buy
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a
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apply
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physical books.

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Task response
Your essay shows some idea, but the point is not clear. Say your main view in the first paragraph.
Coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'and', 'but' to show how your ideas go to the next.
Task response
Give one or two clear examples and explain them. This helps your view.
Language use
Check words and spellings. Fix 'physically' vs 'physical'.
Content
You discuss the topic and keep to it most of the time.
Ideas
You show some ideas about readers and books.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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