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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people say that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjets that will be useful for their future careers. Other people s

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 some individuals’ point of view, academic
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 should be the
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attention
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of attention
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 for
students
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students,
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that
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which
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 will be beneficial in shaping their academic
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pursue
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while
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 others assume
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apply
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 non
core
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non-core
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subjects
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such
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, such
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 as music and sports
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also
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, also
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 play a crucial role
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.
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, to my mind,
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 topic engages with several discussions. As
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 known, it is a popular statement that
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 a
high skilled
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high-skilled
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 person is someone who has adequate abilities in a particular field, continuing
prefer
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to prefer
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 to focus on only academic
subjects
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 rather than being involved in art competitions or music festivals, etc. Typically,
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 people do not waste leisure
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 on “unnecessary” activities.
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, one of these people
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 scientists
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apply
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 who do research on a particular academic subject to gain knowledge, investigates
cores
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core
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 related to technology, society. They usually don’t devote their
time
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 to additional activities which were listed
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,
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however
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, it can be seen that
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 some of them
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 quite
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stringently, which can be observed from their lifestyle. To clarify, some students growing up without hobbies,
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who
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 are consistently engaged in their work,
study
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study,
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 may feel fatigue and become easily irritated. Because of these common reasons, it is vital to extend our knowledge beyond essential
subjects
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, and explore the ones that will assist us
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in
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 developing intellectual capacity. In conclusion, if you
perceive
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understand
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how to manage your
time
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 comprehensively, it is possible to allocate sufficient
time
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 for each of the
subjects
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. I both recommend the offers not only for the students but
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every
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for every
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 human being

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task response
State your view clearly at the start. Then give 2 or 3 clear ideas with a short example for each.
coherence
Use simple links to show the flow. Use words like First, Also, But, Finally. Keep sentences short.
coherence
Make each paragraph hold one main idea. Start with a small sentence about the idea, then give a short example or reason.
language
Check grammar and word choice. Use short, plain words. Avoid long, tired lines.
task response
End with a clear conclusion that restates your view and sums up the ideas.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides.
structure
There is a basic form of essay (intro, body, conclusion).
content
The essay shows some thought about balance beyond the core subjects.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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