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The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide key information about the various reasons for flight delays in Asian nations between the years 2015 and 2016. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there is are considerable increase in the operations management sectors.
In addition
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air
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 traffic control and
air
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 weather experience a growth,
whereas
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 airport security and military factors saw a decrease.
According to
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 what is shown, operations management was a major reason, with slightly over a third of flight delays.
Air
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 traffic control represents a quarter of the delay, and bad weather nearly a fifth. Airport security had the smallest percentage at 4%. In terms of 2016, the operations management grew to represent 46%, becoming the most significant reason for flight delay. Bad weather increased to 23%, and airport security rose to 13%.
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decrease
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a decrease
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 to 12% was experienced in
air
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 traffic control. The military factors continued to be the smallest reasons.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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