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Some people think the best option is to accept a difficult situation, such as having a job they do not enjoy or not having enough money. Others believe it is better to try to make such situations better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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, stressing about a job they hate doing, which they may do bad at it, and
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 is to resign and find another
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, your mood will change significantly for the better, and
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, being happy is important for your health, and you'll be way more confident.
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, not changing something you dislike doing or seeing
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, will have a huge impact
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, not being motivated to
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, you'll be late for
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, from my own knowledge, your whole day will be ruined, and
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 will want to be alone all the time.
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, your relationship with other
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, not changing a daily difficult situation will have an impact
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, if
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 your whole day will level up, and meeting
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 will be a fun interaction.
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,
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 must find a solution for any kind of problem.

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structure
Plan your answer. Start with a short intro, then two main ideas, then a clear end.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Use a clear topic sentence.
language
Use simple words. Keep short sentences. This helps how you say your views.
content
Give real life examples for each point to back up your ideas.
content
You try to show both sides of the issue.
conclusion
You give your own view at the end.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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