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3 You have recently flown to another country on a business trip. You were satisfied with the flight, but didn’t like services at the airport. Write a letter to the airport manager and say Give your flight details Why were you disappointed? Suggest some improvements to the airport services

Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the services at the Montreal Airport
last
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 week on my
flight
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 day. I travelled from London to Montreal,
flight
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 number AC454. I had a connecting
flight
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 from Montreal to Toronto, AB395. So I had to reach
to
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apply
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another gate to board
this
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flight
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 as soon as possible
due to
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 limited time. I was very disappointed because I could not board
and
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, and
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 the reason was
all
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that all
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 sign
boards
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signboards
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 at the Airport are in French, which
guide
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guides
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 only those passengers to show the way to specific gate numbers who can read French. I even asked people to guide me
but
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, but
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 not able to understand
due to
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language
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 barrier.
Finally
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, a security guard helped me
but
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, but
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 it was too late to take my
flight
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. I would highly appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could install signs in English as well so people from other countries do not struggle to find
find
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apply
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their
ways
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way
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. Thank you for your assistance. Yours faithfully, Rohan

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coherence
Try to put one main idea in each paragraph.
grammar
Fix small grammar and misspelling. Use simple forms: get to, signs, I am not able, not 'to' after reach; remove 'find find'.
tone
Keep a formal tone and a clear request, with polite wordings.
content
Add exact date and place and repeat flight numbers for clear read.
content
The letter has a clear purpose and polite tone.
structure
It opens with a proper greeting and ends with a closing.
content
Flight details are given in the text.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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