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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir, I am writing regarding the current situation of the
room
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 I share with another student.My name is Douglas,and I am a
third year
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 computer engineering student. I would like to start by explaining the issue
further
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.
Firstly
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,the
room
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 we share is quite small and not well aerated.
In addition
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,I find that my
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room-mate
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roommate
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 is quite noisy,and brings a lot of his friends to the
room
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,and unfortunately,they end up messing up the
room
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 and don't clean up afterwards.
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,I would like to add that I have
up-coming
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 examinations in the next few weeks, and I prefer studying in my
room
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. I would like to get a single
room
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 to myself if possible, and per-adventure
this
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 cannot be granted,I would like to share a
room
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 with a colleague of mine who I know quite well and would surely make a very good
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room-mate
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roommate
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. I would really appreciate and look forward to a
favorable
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 response from you. Yours faithfully, Douglas.

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coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph hold one main idea. Start with a short intro, then list the problems, then give your request and a plan for action.
task response
Use short and clear sentences. Show cause and effect: noise and clutter affect study, so you want a quieter space.
tone
Formal tone is kept well.
content
Clear request for a single room or a known roommate.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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