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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad? Try to do this under exam conditions — try to avoid looking at any notes you've made while studying this section. Remember, in the exam you'd have about 40 minutes to complete this task.

In recent years,
people
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still
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have still
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 considered what is the advantages and disadvantages
living
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of living
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 and
studing
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studying
in
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apply
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abroad.
This
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 essay will explain both views.
First,
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people
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 who are leaving their country will find new
experience
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experiences
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, which
can
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they can
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 not get if they
are
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apply
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only live in their state.
It is clear that
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 every country has
own
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its own
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 culture. Understanding culture means not only learn about
histroy
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history
 but
also
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 the perspective. It can make
people
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 more
tolerate
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tolerant
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to view
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of viewing
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 some cases.
Second
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The second
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 advantage is boarder our mind. If
people
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 study abroad,
people
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 will change their
chritical
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critical
 thinking
which
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, which
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they gets
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gets
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get
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 from the lectures and the
curriculums
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curriculum
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. At least,
people
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 will learn about
new
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a new
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langguage
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language
, which can be
value added
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valuable
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 to other citizens.
On the other hand
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, making
decision
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a decision
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 to live and study abroad is not easy. The obvious thing that
people
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 must be
lost
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losing
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 is money. Sometimes, extra money is needed
to
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for
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transport
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transportation
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.
For
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example
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example,
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 to move abroad must buy
flight
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a flight
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 ticket,
house
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a house
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, etc. Another disadvantage,
people
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 need more time to prepare their health. Since climate change has
been happened
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occurred
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, it would be hard for
people
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 to adapt
the
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to the
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 weather or disease if they do not have
fit
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the right
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condition
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conditions
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.
For example
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, in South East Asia, almost of the countries
is
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are
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tropic
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tropical
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, but
,
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apply
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 in
Europe Countries
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European countries
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, almost
of
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all of
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 them
has
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have
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 different weather
either
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, either
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 cold or very cold. It is
inline
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in line
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 with the list of
sickness
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sicknesses
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on
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in
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 the countries. In
conlussion
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conclusion
,
people
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 can get something new if they live or study abroad (experience and thinking). Yet,
people
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 must spend more money and research the country to adapt
the
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to the
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 weather.

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planning
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cohesion
Use clear link words to join ideas. This helps the flow from one point to the next.
language
Check for mistakes in spelling and grammar, and fix them.
content
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
structure
There is an intro and a ending.
vocabulary
Some good words stay with the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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