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Many people believe that the world is facing numerous serious problems today, such as climate change, overpopulation, and global conflicts. Which problem do you think is the most concerning? Why? What solutions can be proposed to address it?

The modern world is grappling with a range of critical challenges,from geopolitical tensions to escalating population growth.
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 believe that
climate
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 change is the most pressing issue of our time
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 its far-reaching consequences on ecosystems,economies, and human survival. Unlike other problems, its impact is both global and irreversible if not addressed urgently. One of the most alarming aspects of
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change
 is its ability to intensify natural disasters. Rising global temperatures have led to more frequent and severe hurricanes,
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wildfires
, and droughts,which not only destroy infrastructure but
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 displace millions of people.
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 , the melting of polar ice caps and rising sea levels threaten to submerge coastal cities , potentially creating a new wave of
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 refugees. These environmental shifts
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disturb
 food production and water supplies, exacerbating poverty and inequality in vulnerable regions. To combat
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 approach is essential. Governments must implement strict environmental regulations, invest in renewable energy, and phase out fossil fuels. International cooperation is
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 vital , as
climate
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channge
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change
 transcends national borders. On an individual level, people can contribute by adopting sustainable lifestyles-reducing waste ,
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 energy , and supporting eco-friendly businesses. Education and
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awareness
 campaigns can
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 empower communities to
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 meaningful action. In conclusion,
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 the world is facing numerous serious problems,
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 change poses the greatest threat
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 its global and
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 implications.Only through collective responsibility and decisive action can we hope to mitigate its effects and secure a livable planet for
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future generations.

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Clear view that climate change is the main issue.
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Good use of markers like 'To combat this crisis' and 'In conclusion'.
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Idea to state actions at different levels.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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