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The rise of social media has significantly impacted communication and relationships. To what extent has social media improved or damaged interpersonal connections? What measures can be taken to mitigate any potential negative effects?

Communication and relationships have been changed by the dramatic increase in social
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 networks.
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this
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 method is improving our daily life, it
also
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 has countless drawbacks that need to be taken into account.
To begin
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 with, communicating with
people
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 has become much easier, cheaper, and faster because of social
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,
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 saving time and money. Because of social
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,
people
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 can instantly send messages to one another without any delay,
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 make calls.
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 allows
people
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 to stay connected, not only when they are apart from each other, but
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 even if they are living in a different country.
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, social
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also
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 has several drawbacks
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 it allows
people
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 to stay anonymous, and in doing so,
people
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 with dishonest intentions can sometimes make a fuss and spread hate by posting and commenting on other
people
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's posts, which sometimes affects
people
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's morale and is often the prime reason for their depression,
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 leading to misunderstandings between peers.
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, there are several measures that can be taken to prevent
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; one of them is applying strict cyber laws.
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 many countries have rules and regulations for social
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, applying them is, as a matter of fact, not feasible. Applying those laws and punishing those who break the rules can ease the negative effects. Another way is by promoting a social campaign about the negative effects of social
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 society. In conclusion,
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 social
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 has several drawbacks, it has become an essential part of our daily
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 and is easing our communication.

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development
The essay has a good aim and adds both sides, but add more clear steps and examples to back each point.
structure
Make a clear map for each paragraph with a main idea in a simple line (topic sentence).
content
Give real examples or data to show a point, even if short.
grammar
Check word choice like 'this method' and use simple, exact words.
balance
The student shows both good and bad sides of social media.
structure
There is a clear start and end in the essay.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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