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The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004.

The table provides information about
population
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growth
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, the average
number
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 of
births
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 per
woman
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, and
life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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 in
countries
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 with different income levels in 2000 and 2004.
Overall
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, the percentage of
population
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growth
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 and the average
number
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 of
births
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 per
woman
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 slightly decreased in all income groups over the period,
while
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Life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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 showed a gradual increase. In 2002, the proportion of
population
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growth
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 in high-income
countries
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 was slightly lower than that of middle-income
countries
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, at approximately 0.8% and 0.9% respectively.
In addition
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, the average
number
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 of
births
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 per
woman
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 in low-income
countries
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 was the highest among the three groups, at around 3.9,
while
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life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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 was the lowest in
this
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 category. In 2004, the mean
number
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 of
births
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 per
woman
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 in high-income
countries
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 remained unchanged at about 1.7,
whereas
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 the figure for
population
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growth
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 in low-income
countries
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 experienced a gradual decrease, falling to around 1.8%. In terms of
life
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expectancy
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 at
birth
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, high-income
countries
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 recorded the highest figure, reaching 78.8 years by the end of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, number, births, woman, life, expectancy, birth, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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