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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with tis statement?

It is clear that
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 living in a foreign
country
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own
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 benefits and drawbacks to consider. The social issues of living abroad
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are
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 a topic to discuss in many countries. I strongly agree with the idea that living in
different
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a different
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country
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own
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its own
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 issues. First of all, a social problem is
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language
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the language
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 barrier
which
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 is the most important issue. By
this
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 I mean, it has the potential to cause many problems, like lack of communication with other people, lack of confidence, and
feel
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anxaiety
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anxiety
.
For example
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, when you go to another
country
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for living
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to live
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while
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 you are not able to speak their
language
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, you can't make friends or
creat
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create
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 a relationship or communicate with others.
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secondly
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Secondly
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, another practical
problems
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problem
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 would be misunderstanding.
In other words
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, when you are not aware
to behave
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of behaving
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 well and
probably
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apply
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your
behaviors
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behaviours
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 and
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 in many situations
be
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are
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unsotuible
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unsuitable
which
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, which
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lead
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leads
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 to misconceptions.
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, in
the
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apply
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Iran, body
language
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 and speaking
have
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direct
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 related
with
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to
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 each other
so
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, so
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,
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apply
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foreigers
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foreigners
 who come to Iran should be
awareness
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about
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of
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 the
speak
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speaking
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 and the body
language
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 in order to
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avoid miunderstanding
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miunderstanding
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misunderstanding
.
Moreover
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, finding a job is really hard.
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, an individual who works in a
foriegn resturant
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foreign restaurant
 may because
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language
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a language
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 barrier,
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and can
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can nor
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cannot
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 serve
as well as
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 other work force so,
he
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so he
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/she
recived
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received
 negative feedback from customers.
in
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In
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 conclusion, individuals who want to
living
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live
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 in a
foriegn
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foreign
country
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 should before imigration, being dominant
on
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in
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 the
language
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 to avoid these issues

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task response
Be clear about your view from the start. State if you agree or not, then give two or three reasons.
coherence
Put each main idea in its own paragraph. Start with a simple topic sentence. Use clear linking to show how ideas connect.
language
Give more real and simple examples to support each point. Check spelling and grammar to avoid confusion.
content
The essay shows a clear idea that living in a foreign country can bring social and practical issues.
content
You give examples such as language and job problems, which show you know the topic.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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