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You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: Say that you liked their photos of your family Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event Give them the details of the event.

Dear Mr Tam, I hope you are doing well. I am fine. I am happy with my Family
Photos
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 you
take
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photos
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. Thank you very much. I find that not only meaning but
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beautiful
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a beautiful
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 Memory. I always bring it with my Wallet. My Parents are in
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 in my Wallet.
Beside
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, we wanted
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you should take beautiful
Photos
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 of my
Birthday
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of
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next Month in order to make happy memories for my Family. I think
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 it helps strengthen Family bonds. Can you take
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 for my Family
in
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on
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 the 13th of next Month
.
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 My
Birthday
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 organisation a Party at about 7 pm in Vitro restaurant, the Restaurant is located in the MB bank at 37 Nguyen Trai Street. A Party takes about 2 hours to organization with my Family and my best Friends. So you will take
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 not only for Family but
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 for Friends so as to beautiful Memory on my
Birthday
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. I hope
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 that you help me take
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 on my
Birthday
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. Please reply to me. Thank you very much. Wish best wishes Ms Van Anh

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clarity
Use short and clear sentences. Break long ideas into two or three lines.
structure
Put one idea in one part. Use a new paragraph for the ask and for the event details.
facts
Check date and place. Write the date, time, and place in a clear line.
tone
Keep a polite and formal tone. End with a clear sign off.
vocabulary
Use simple words and spell common names right.
greeting
Good start with a greeting.
content
You say you are happy with the photos.
details
You give date and place for the event.
purpose
You ask for more photos for the party.
tone
You end with a polite note.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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