Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for ordinary people?

In today's society

owning

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a small business has become common

nowadays

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apply

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Also

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, most of the small business owners sell their hustle to large companies. In

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essay,

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I will be discussing

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apply

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pro's

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and

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cons

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the dissapearence

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dissapearence

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disappearance

of companies. On the one hand,

start-up's

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start-ups

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bring underdeveloped countries financial gain and

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their

citizen's

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citizens'

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living conditions.

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Nov 25, 2025

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grammar

Fix the grammar, especially word order and plurals. For example, 'In today’s society owning a small business has become common nowadays' can be 'Today many people run small businesses.'

coherence

Make a clear plan. State a thesis in the intro and stick to it in the body. Present two sides and finish with a short conclusion.

task response

Give two or three strong ideas for each side and add simple examples to show them.

spelling

Check spellings carefully: 'dissapearence' should be 'disappearance', 'start-up's' should be 'startups' or 'start-ups'.

structure

Group your writing into clear paragraphs: intro, body for advantages, body for disadvantages, and conclusion.

content

The writer tries to discuss both sides of the issue.

structure

There is a basic frame for an essay with room for a thesis.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

56 words

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