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The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the number of spaces in hospitals of several countries for every thousand residents,
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 the table shows the amount of money spent on healthcare by the government. From the first
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 it is evident that Japan provides the most hospital beds, and the other illustration suggests that the country spends the least out of the showcased countries,
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 having the highest life expectancy. Connecting the two
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 one might presume that medicine could be more accessible in
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 country to reach
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 compelling results
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 people may not require the in-depth medical help provided at hospitals as often. With the use of the bar
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 it is shown that the United States accommodate 3 beds per thousand of the population, being the lowest result of the three.
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 leads one to believe that the US government does not suppose the citizens to either fall ill often
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 or seek professional help in significant numbers at a given time. The Netherlands come second with a result of approximately 4.5 spaces for expected visitors. The
most
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quantity
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number
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 of beds for the same number of people is provided by Japanese hospitals,
that
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which
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being
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for
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beds for
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each
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 thousand residents.
This
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 factor could mean that the country decided to ensure that people have access to the help of highly qualified medics
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 a larger proportion as a preemptive measure or
last
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 resort in case of regular doctors not being enough. The table suggests that out of the three countries presented, the US has contributed the most money to their healthcare, spending 6719 dollars per person, though the life expectancy of Americans is just 78
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 the lowest age showcased. Japan
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 the other
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 residents to live to be up to 83 years of age
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 medical expenses being just over 2500 dollars
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 the lowest of the three,
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 the Netherlands places second yet again for both of those parameters
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 3481 dollars spent on each person and the life expectancy of 80.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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