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The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart depicts the
amount
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number
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 of hospital
beds
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 different countries have per thousand of
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their
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 population. The table shows government spending on health. The chart indicates that there
similarities
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 with regard to the number of
the
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apply
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hospital
beds
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 among countries. The numbers mostly fluctuate
in
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between three and five, excluding two significant spikes. The first is Germany, having eight hospital
beds
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 per thousand of the population, and the second is
Japan
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, having fourteen. The table indicates that average life
expectancy
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 in
Japan
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 is much higher than in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and the US.
Japan
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 spends $2,581 on health per person, which is less than both
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and the US spendings ($3,481 and $6,719 respectively). Despite that,
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 people are expected to live 78 years in the US and 80 years in
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, the
expectancy
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 in
Japan
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 is up to 83 years. To summarise,
the
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Japan
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 has more hospital
beds
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 per thousand of the population, has a high average life
expectancy
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, but still spends less money on health than
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and the US.
This
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 data suggests that there may be a connection between healthcare resources and life
expectancy
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words beds, japan, expectancy, netherlands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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