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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people say that the Internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge or experience.

A percentage of people state that the internet will soon become the preferred method of
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delivery
if
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the
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news and information, which will cause the newspaper and magazines to disappear eventually.
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 do agree that over time the internet will take over
newspaper
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 and magazines
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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i
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 think it
became
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more
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easier to read online than having someone
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deliver it to my home.
Linking Words
although
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 using the internet can be harmful but it
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ir
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it
 easy access for everyone to read about anything
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they'd
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structure
Add a short start that states your view clearly.
structure
End with a short sum up.
coherence
Use simple link words like and, but, then, next to show order.
content
Give one or two examples from life or news to back your idea.
language
Check spelling and fix small mistakes in every sentence.
idea
You show you agree with the idea.
content
You use your own view and why you read online.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • internet
  • news
  • magazines
  • newspapers
  • information
  • access
  • world
  • convenient
  • traditional
  • devices
  • updates
  • social media
  • audience
  • platforms
  • content
  • videos
  • podcasts
  • experience
  • subscriptions
  • cheaper
  • accessible
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