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Band 2.5

Governments and big companies should wok together to reverse environmental damages, rather than expecting individuals to take responsibility. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

goverments
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Governments
 and big
organizations
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organisations
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 working with each other to help the
enviorment
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environment
 from
beging
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being
 damaged, rather than waiting got
residance
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residents
 to take the responsibility.
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strongley
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strongly
 agree that
organzations
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organisations
 and the
goverment
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government
 should look out for
there
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their
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degital
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digital
 footprints and review what they can do better
to
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 the planet.
goverment
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Governments
 and major
compaines
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companies
 hold a big power over many individuals
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so
there
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their
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 voice is heard more and they can make
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 big change and
also
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 implement
a
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apply
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new ways or rules that they can set to provide a greener planet,
therefour
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apply
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goverments
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governments
 should
implemnt
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implement
 strict rules and
regilations
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regulations
 for
comapnies
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companies
 to follow
like
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limit
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a limit
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industry
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on industry
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activites
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activities
.
Although
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 individuals can help protect the environment, expecting them to bear full responsibility is unrealistic. Many environmental problems come from systems that individuals cannot control,
such
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 as plastic production, waste management, and urban planning. Even if people recycle or reduce consumption, these actions have limited influence if companies continue mass production of harmful materials.
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, governments must introduce policies
such
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 as banning single-use plastics,
while
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 corporations must redesign products to be eco-friendly.
This
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 cooperative approach ensures consistent, long-term change.
in
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conclustion
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conclusion
,
goverment
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governments
 and major
compaines
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companies
can really
effect
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affect
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 how we live
in
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daily
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a daily
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bases
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 and how we can lower our carbon footprints
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thats
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 why everyone must follow rules and help for a better planet.

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structure
Plan your essay with a short intro stating your view, then two body paras each with one main idea and a simple example, and finish with a clear conclusion.
structure
Make the intro and conclusion clear. The intro should state the topic and your view in one sentence; the conclusion should restate it.
language
Check spelling and word form. Many errors make the meaning hard to see. Keep sentences simple and correct.
content
Add more concrete examples or facts for your points, not only general ideas.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas. Keep the same subject in sentences and use pronouns clearly to improve flow.
stance
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
content
There are good thoughts on how big groups can help the planet and ideas for rules or changes.
content
The essay contains useful policy ideas, such as limits on plastics and eco-friendly design.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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