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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought in supermarkets in 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008.

The given bar charts illustrate the percentage of
food
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 and goods purchased in supermarkets in three European countries in 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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country
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 A experienced the most significant growth in both
food
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 and goods purchases,
while
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country
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 C consistently had the lowest figures throughout the period. Regarding the
food
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 purchases,
country
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 A started at 10% in 1998 and showed a dramatic rise, reaching 35% in 2008.
Country
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 B had a moderate share of 24% in 1998, increasing slightly to around 26% by 2008.
In contrast
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,
Country
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 C recorded the lowest proportion of
food
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 bought in supermarkets, rising only marginally from 6% to 7% over the same period. In terms of goods, all three countries experienced
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except
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Country
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 B, which remained relatively stable.
Country
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 A saw the most significant growth, rising from 1% in 1998 to nearly 14% in 2008. Meanwhile,
Country
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 C experienced a modest rise,
whereas
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Country
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 B's figure showed almost no change across the ten-year period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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