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The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005, and 2010.

The chart
show
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 the different
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reason
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reasons
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 for people to get absent from
the
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apply
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work
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 in
Eurpean
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European
country
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countries
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 in 2000, 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, the highest percentage of being absent is
due to
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 illness
according to
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 the respondents for the surveys in 2000,
2005
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2005,
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 as well 2010.
On the other hand
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, stress
take
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takes
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 the lowest
percntage
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percentage
reason
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 of absence in the three different years. Family
responsibilites
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responsibilities
 can be
considerd
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considered
 as the second
reason
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 for being absent from
the
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work
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.
Person
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 needs
like
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, like
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appointments
appointements
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appointements,
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 could lead the worker to miss his
work
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which
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, which
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 can take the third place
reason
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 for being absent
according to
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 the chart above. As it is clear from the chart that transportation and weather
condition
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conditions
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 sometimes make a
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difficult
 for the worker to attend his
work
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which
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, which
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 can take
the
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fourth place.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reason, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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