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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things avoiding change.Others,howevre ,think that change is always a good thing. Discussed both views and give your opinion.

Some individuals prefer to do
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 stuff without any
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 , other people
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are
 concerned about how beneficial
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 is .
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 of
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 can damage
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convenience
 and how essential it is for career growth .
Peoples
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 tend to avoid
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however
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changes
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 demand a lot of effort and time . Individuals do not want to change existing conditions , even if
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 are
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 groundbreaking advantages .
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 the researchers from Oxford
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, some communities
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 Russia were against the structural reforms .
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 up being restricted by Parliament.
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changes
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 are vital for career up . Employers who
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want
 an increase
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 to try new conditions
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 workers may not get any
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, even in
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wage
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.
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in
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 to provide new ideas or updates to existing products .
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, workers who
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 up with innovations
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 rise . In conclusion ,
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 drawback,
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opponents
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 are counteracting it because it is uncomfortable ,
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 , proponents of
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 boost in growth .

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task
Make your view clear in the first line. Say what you think about the topic.
task
Give real and clear reasons for your view. Tie each idea to the task.
coherence
Plan the essay. Put one idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas and show how ideas are connected.
content
You try to cover both views.
content
You give some examples to make your point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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