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“The use of mobile phones and computers for communication has affected our reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

Nowadays, with the widespread usage of digital devices
such
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 as smartphones and computers,
people
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's reading and writing have been affected to a great extent. I strongly support
this
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 fact
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 they can influence our
skill
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 both in a beneficial or detrimental way. On the plus side, when using computers for reading, we are usually able to open multiple documents and switch between them in order to find the topics we are looking for.
Moreover
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, we can search in a document for keywords and save time on reading rather than just finding where to read in long documents. On the writing side, typing a passage is always more readable and faster to edit and polish as it is no longer dependent
of
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 handwriting , which is totally different in
people
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. In our technology-driven life, the speed of typing with phones or laptops is much faster than writing
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, especially
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 in
young
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the young
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 generation.
On the other hand
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, reading on screens for too long will lead to dry eyes and exacerbate the visual problems.
For example
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, after the COVID pandemic, I had to wear glasses
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 staring at the screen for hours in order to pass my university courses.
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, autocorrection features in most
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the
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application
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applications
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 can undermine
people
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's spelling skills as they will be overreliant
to
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 AI to correct the spelling mistakes. There are many
people
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 who struggle to write words on paper
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, even
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 with
high
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a high
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 level of education.
Last
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 but not least, reading and writing on phones or computers can be distracting as we get notifications or emails and lose our concentration and focus
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, which
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 might reduce
the
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our
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 attention span as well. In conclusion, I completely agree that digital devices
influenced
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 the way we used to read
or
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and
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 write
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, but
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 if we
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use these devices correctly, their benefits will outweigh their disadvantages.

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structure
Make each paragraph have one clear main idea and link it to the task.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words such as also, but, so so the flow stays easy to follow.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Use plain words and short sentences. Fix phrases like dependent on handwriting and remove hard words.
content
The essay shows both sides and a clear view.
structure
There is a clear plan with sign words like On the plus side and In conclusion.
content
Good life examples from study and daily use help the point.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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