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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Today many countries around the globe, customers can go to a
super shop
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supermarket
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 and buy
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variety
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a variety
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types
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apply
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of
food
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 produced in different parts of the world.
Although
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 it has
brings
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brought
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 some drawbacks to the customers,
but
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apply
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I believe
,
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 it’s a positive development for the consumer as they can
taste
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variety
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a variety
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types
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of types
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 of
food
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 and
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dietary needs. One significant benefit of importing goods, the customer can
taste
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variety
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a variety
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types
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of types
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 of
food
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 and
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dietary needs.
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, olive oil is the
amongst
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apply
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healthiest
oil
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oils
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 that can be used to cook
food
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. It helps to reduce high blood pressure, high bad cholesterol,
inflammation
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and inflammation
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 in the body, thereby
prevent
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preventing
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heart related
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 issues, like stroke.
Furthermore
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, consumers can
taste
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 tasty fruits, like
apple
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apples
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, dates,
orange
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oranges
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,
avocado
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avocados
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, etc., which are not grown in Bangladesh because of the environment. As a customer, we have the option to
taste
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theses
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these
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 fruits
along with
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 the vitamins, minerals and
fiber
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fibre
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 we intake whenever we eat fruits in a raw form, which
resulting
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results in
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 a healthier and longer life.
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, importing the same
food
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that is
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 grown in the home country
,
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apply
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 may discourage the producer
to grow
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from growing
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 it again. As a country, we become dependent on other countries.
For instance
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,
In
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in
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 Bangladesh,
majority
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the majority
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 of
onion
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onions
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need
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needed
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,
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apply
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 have to
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be fulfill
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fulfill
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fulfilled
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 by importing
it
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them
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 from other countries. If the production
is hampered
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apply
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of the
food
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 that we are importing
, it
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is hampered, it
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 will increase the price of imported goods. Means that
consumer
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consumers
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 have to pay
higher
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a higher
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 price for
those
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that
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food
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.
To sum up
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, for some situations
customer
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customers
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 have to pay
higher
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a higher
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 price for the product, but the opportunity to
taste
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variety
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a variety
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types
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of types
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 of
food
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 which will
fulfill
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fulfil
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 our dietary needs can be super beneficial, and
also
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 reduce health
hazard
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hazards
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. The government have to import the goods in a way that it would not affect the production
local
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of local
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food
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.

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improvement
Plan your answer first. Make a clear view in the intro and a strong finish.
coherence
Keep your idea neat. Each paragraph has one main idea and a simple link to the next.
grammar
Use short, direct sentences. Fix grammar mistakes like 'has brings'.
content
You give real examples like olive oil and fruits.
structure
You show both sides and a final view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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