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The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON

The map below shows two possible sites (s1 and s2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON
The map chart gives information about two proposed locations (S1 and S2) of a new shop in a town called Garlsdon.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the S1 site is situated north west in the countryside,
while
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 S2 is
located
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also located
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also
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 in the same area but in the middle of the diagram. And we can see that both of the suggested places have the railway running near them.
According to
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 the data shown, the light brown zone is called the housing district, and it seems that it is pretty far away from S1 but close to S2.
On the other hand
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, the dark brown
region
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 is named the industry, and through
it
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it,
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 we can notice the main roads. The settlement introduced has a population of 65000, and not far from it, exactly 12 km away, is another
region
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, Hindon, and it has 10000 people living in it. And
south
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in south
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southwest
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west
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west,
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 the
region
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 is a residence titled Bransdon, and it has 15000 individuals. And about 25 km away is a
region
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 that lies
nearby
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near
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 the residential area; it is Cransdon
and
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, and
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 it has 29000 citizens.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words region with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed
  • relative to
  • proximity
  • accessibility
  • impact
  • community
  • contrast
  • access
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • congestion
  • infrastructure
  • economic growth
  • reflection
  • environmental concerns
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