Some people think the money spent in developing the technology for space exploration is not justified. There are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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with, some people think developing the
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for
space
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exploration is a waste of time and
money
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. And suggest that there are more efficient ways to spend
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money
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. In
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essay, I'll elaborate and explain both points and give my opinion
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Firstly
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,
space
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exploration is known for its slow progression and requires a lot of patience. Mainly
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its long missions.
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, sending an astronaut to an unknown planet would take about 4-8 years. But with advanced
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,
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could lessen the time for these kinds of trips.
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, many rumours suggest that we don't live alone in
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universe.
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explains why they are giving it more attention.
Secondly
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, yes,
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agree that
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could be spent on more needed things
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as building, research and basically just improving the country's finances and science. But, do you truly believe that the government is sharing every bit of knowledge ?
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, didn't you consider why they want to develop more
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for
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exploration
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They are definitely hiding a massive secret, which explains why they want to dig deeper
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exploring the
space
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To sum up
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, there are many things needed to upgrade. I suggest
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spending the
money
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wisely and not neglecting people's needs. I disagree because there is are many of undefined stuff in
space
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that could help us improve the world and could maybe enhance modern
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.
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, it's important to keep on exploring and finding new things that could help us in the future.

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Task response: Choose one clear view. Start with a simple sentence that states your view. Then give two strong reasons and one example. End with a clear decision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • justified expenditure
  • technological advances
  • earthly concerns
  • telecommunications
  • environmental conservation
  • inspire innovation
  • diplomatic relationships
  • peaceful cooperation
  • long-term survival
  • colonization
  • commercial ventures
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