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Writing Samples
Band 4

the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

The two maps
illustrations
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illustrate
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 the islip town's
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center
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centre
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 in
current
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the current
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 time and in the
futures
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future
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 plans.
Overall
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, the
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center
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centre
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 will
develope
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develop
 more details and will rebuild the streets, making it look
complitly
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completely
 different to now. Currently, the main
road
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 goes in the
middel
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middle
 of the
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center
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centre
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making
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, making
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 a straight
road
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, accompanied
with
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by
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 shops
deom
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on
 both sides.
On
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In
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 the
South
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South,
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 there is
a
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apply
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countryside, but
on
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in
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 the
North
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North,
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 there are some
housings
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houses
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. From the main
road
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two
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, two
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 roads connect, where one leads to a school
while
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 the other
to
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leads to
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 a park.
According to
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 the plan, the school and
housings
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housing
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 will only stay the same. As for the main
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road
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road,
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 it will
a
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apply
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have a dual carriageway that
make
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makes
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 a circle around the
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center
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centre
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. In the middle of
it
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it,
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 the shops that were on the South
of
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side of
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 the old main
road
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 will stay the same, but for the shops that were on the north side, a bus station, shopping
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center
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centre
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 and car park will replace them.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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