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It is a fact that a lot of Vietnamese students go abroad to study every year. However, studying in a foreign country has both advantages and disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write an essay of about 250 words to support your opinion

Nowadays, more and more
students
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decided
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have decided
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 to go abroad
for studying
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to study
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, most of them are asian
students
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.
However
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, studying in a foreign
country
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 has both advantages and disadvantages. In
this
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 essay, I
will
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would
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 like to share my opinion with some
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examples
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.
To begin
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 with, studying in a
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foregin
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foreign
country
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 can gain more
knowledge
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 and skill, and have
wider
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a wider
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 horizon. It is because when a student
studying
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studies
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 in a
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foregin
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foreign
country
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, they will learn more in their own
country
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,
such
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 as the local culture of that
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foregin
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foreign
country
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, some special
knowledge
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 only be taught in that
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foregin
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foreign
country
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, and some lifelong skills which they use to take care
themselves
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of themselves
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. During their study in a
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foregin
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foreign
country
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, they will meet other friends from that foreign
country
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 or
other
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another
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country
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.
Then
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 they can share their
knowledge
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 and culture from their own
country
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 together,
lead
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leading
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 to
a
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an
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 interactive learning and
wider
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widening
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 their horizon. On the other
sides
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hand
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, studying in a
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foregin
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foreign
country
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need to use
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requires
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 more
money
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 to support daily life. There are numerous items
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that need
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 to be paid
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for.
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For instance
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,
tutorial
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the tutorial
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 fee for the school,
fee
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the fee
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 for renting
house
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a house
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 or living in the dormitory,
money
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 for buying food and drink and the fee for
traveling
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travelling
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 to the
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foregin coutry
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foreign country
. If the
students
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studying
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are studying
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 in a foreign
country
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, it
more
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apply
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cause
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causes
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 a
money
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 loss for the family.
In addition
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, as there are different exchange
rate
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rates
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 for different
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country
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countries
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, like 1 USD to 7HKD. So when the parents
preparing
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are preparing
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money
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 for the children, it may cause
a
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an
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 economic burden to the family. To
summarize
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summarise
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,
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apply
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for
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apply
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me
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apply
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, I agree that
students
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 should go abroad to study. Since
the
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apply
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knowledge
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 and
the
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apply
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horizon cannot be bought
by
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with
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money
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,
and
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apply
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there are limited
opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
students
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.
Although
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 it may cause
a
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an
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 economic burden for the
familly
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family
, I suggest
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giving
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 it a try to go abroad to study, friends and
knowledge
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 may not be gained in the future.

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structure
Plan with a clear start and end. Write an intro that states your view and a conclusion that restates it.
task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it in all body paragraphs.
content
Give one or two clear examples to back each idea. Do not add many small points.
language
Use simple and correct grammar. Check words like foregin to foreign and avoid long, hard sentences.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas (but, also, however, therefore).
content
The writer gives a clear view that agrees with studying abroad.
content
There are some relevant ideas about cost and horizon.
effort
There are attempts to give examples and reasons.
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