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You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter • say how you feel about his performance • give details of your musical activities • explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Mr Tuan, I am writing
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 you about a concert very good for me
last
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 weekend. I
fell
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 not only singer
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 good
but
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also
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you
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 are handsome. I am
interesting
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 and satisfied
about
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 a concert for me. I think
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singe
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 a “Co gai den tu hom qua” very
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. It is quite deep
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 that people are so interesting and satisfied. I think
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 it is success
you
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in
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. Your Musical can have a positive effect on
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me. I often
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in
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a
party
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 and
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, it takes me about 2 Years. I want to get
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 people about me. But I think
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do have
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have not
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 musical skills,
that
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 I want
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to practice
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 in order to enhance
musical
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my musical
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 skills and
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 better. Next Month I will join
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a Competition. I would like you to
helps
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 me with your Musical activities. Can you help me
in
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 Musical activities? I hope
,
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 that you can help me. In the Future, we can
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 in a concert. Please reply
me
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. Yours sincerely. Ms Van Anh

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stellar performance
  • captivating
  • musical prowess
  • talent
  • repertoire
  • collaboration
  • mentorship
  • resonate
  • aspiring musician
  • composition
  • rendition
  • inspirational
  • vocal range
  • harmonize
  • skillset
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