The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia

The two pie
chart
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charts
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show the breakdown of the populations of Canada and Australia
according to
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their marital status, including married, separated but not divorced, never married, widowed, divorced, and same sex
marriage
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Overall
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, there is a slight difference between
both
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the
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charts
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two charts
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. Most
people
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in both countries
either are
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are either
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or
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married or
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have been married. A notable contrast is that there are no same sex
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marriage
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marriages
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occured
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occurring
in Australia,
while
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in Canada these kind
of
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apply
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marriage
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marriages
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exist.  In Canada, more
people
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are single (separated, divorced, widowed, never married) than are married. Those who
separated
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are separated
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has
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have
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the highest proportion with 53%, widowed at 7%, never married at 7%, and divorced at 1%.
However
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, the married
people
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still
has
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have
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significant
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a significant
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proportion
approximately
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, approximately
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at
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29% and those with same sex
marriage
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at 3%. 
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in Australia, the
amount
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number
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of
people
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who
still
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are still
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married has the biggest percentage with 46%. Canadian marriages are more likely to end in separation than Australian ones, since the number of
separated
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separations
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is lower at 41%. The remaining categories
contributes
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contribute
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relatively small shares, with widowed at 6%, single at 5%, and divorced at 2%.
Although
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the Australian percentage is double the Canadian, the figure (2%) is still low.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words marriage, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • married
  • single
  • never married
  • divorced
  • widowed
  • Canada
  • Australia
  • pie chart
  • share
  • part
  • percentage
  • largest
  • smallest
  • many
  • most
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • different
  • both
  • also
  • but
  • and
  • in contrast
  • overall
  • pattern
  • trend
  • reason
  • cause
  • because
  • due to
  • people
  • age
  • culture
  • society
  • explain
  • compare
  • conclude
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