The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation.

The following
two
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diagrams illustrate the layout of the student accommodation in 2010 and its current position.
Overall
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, the dormitory has increased in size
and
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, and
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new opportunities and places have already been created. In 2010, the structure of
this
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place was quite cutting-edge, designed with a wide range of rooms. Starting with the main entrance, which
it
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was located in the eastern bottom side of the building. Outside of the entry, there was a field called the garden.
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, the garden took place on the top of the map. Following the entrance, there was a hallway , and on the left, there were
two
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rooms: a bathroom and a bedroom with commodities. Students' bedrooms
was
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were
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approximately 3 in number,
which
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with
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the first one right next to the entrance. Turning left in the corridor, there was a kitchen in the middle of the
two
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student bedrooms. After reaching the second
bedroom
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bedroom,
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there was a living room. By now, the garden on the bottom decreased in size, so as to add new parking,
also
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the top
also
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shortened for building expansion. Considering the inner changes, the hallway
minimised
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was minimised
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,
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apply
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in order to create
room
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a room
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which is specialised for unnecessary stuff. The living room has been removed
and
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, and
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two
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students’ bedrooms
added
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have been added
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with an expansion.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words two with synonyms.
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