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**Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car. To what extent do you agree or disagree?**

Many
people
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 suggest that the way to make the road safer is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car. I disagree
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 there is more debate on
weather its
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whether it's
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 true or not.
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 one hand, some
people
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 would say that
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 safer when older
people
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 drive rather than younger
people
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and
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, and
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 most of them would be
parents
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,
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. Nowadays
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nowadays
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nowadays,
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parents
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 are not adapting that their children are fully grown
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 topic has many subjective ways to understand. A big percentage of
people
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 would really ignore the safety rules
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 matter what age they’re in
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 example, seat belts or road speed limit
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, so
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its
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it's
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 not just about age
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its
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 about the person’s ability to have responsibilities. In the other hand, the best solution is to give extra courses on responsibility for all ages no matter how many years thieve been driving, And limit the speed on the road for
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 will make it more safer for everyone and most importantly seatbelt rule if no one will follow
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 rule they must have a reasonable amount of fee to pay evetime they make
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 mistake
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 there driver lienee should be taken away and they have to repeat the tests and take extra courses on how to be responsible. In conclusion,
parents
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 must trust their kids
on driving
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to drive
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 so they can feel responsible and adaptable. When
parents
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 don’t trust their kids
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 of punching their
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parents
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parents,
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 they can do many dangerous
staff
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things
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 that will affect them and
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 others.

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task
Say clearly what you think in the first line and tell how much you agree or not.
structure
Make a short plan before you write: one idea per paragraph.
coherence
Use easy links to join ideas, like and, but, so, also.
content
Give one or two clear examples to back each point.
language
Check errors in spelling and grammar and use correct caps.
content
You show some effort to give a view and try to form an idea.
structure
You use a conclusion to show your view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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