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Band 2.5

in their advertising, business nowdays usually emphasise that that their products are new in some way why is this like? do you think it is positive or negative development?

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 4. In barcoded KCL-22 cells (
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 2b-f), clones that grow with ABL001 are not the ones that grow with nilotinib, so each drug leaves a different resistance pool. KCL-22 xenografts on single-agent ABL001 or nilotinib show an early drop in
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 size and
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 a return of growth with resistance (
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 3a). With the ABL001-nilotinib pair from the start (
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 size falls and does not return after treatment stops. In one CML patient, ABL001 gives a clear response
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 later the disease comes back with myristoyl-pocket mutations, the same kind of resistance as in the preclinical work (
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structure
Add a short intro and a short end to the paragraph to frame data.
language
Use simple linking words like first, then, next, finally to connect ideas.
content
Give a quick overall note at the start about all data and end with a short summary.
grammar
Check spelling and punctuation; put a space after commas.
grammar
Try to keep past tense for all results.
structure
Clear steps in how the results move from one figure to the next.
content
Good use of exact data from figures (2, 3a, 3b, 4).
insight
Logical order from single work to pair of drugs.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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