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University students are incresingly studying abroad ad part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages.

A majority of
student
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popluation
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population
 around the world is inclined towards the idea of studying abroad.
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 has both advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, it offers the benefits of international exposure and
overall
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development
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 of an individual
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 outweighs the disadvantages. Studying in a foreign country has certain
drawback
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drawbacks
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 as feeling depressed . People have to leave their family members and friends to study abroad.
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 , the state of being alone and in
unfamiliar
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an unfamiliar
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 environment can give rise to the feeling of isolation.
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,
students
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 face difficulty in adapting to a new environment. Living in
completely
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 new system and following regulations or lifestyle which is different from
thier
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their
 home country can be challenging.
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, Many
students
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 struggle to comply with stricter rules abroad.
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, the experience of pursuing education overseas has several merits. One of its major
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 is enhanced social
skills
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.
Students
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 studying abroad meet people from different countries or cultural
background
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backgrounds
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.
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, they exchange knowledge about various customs, language or heritage.
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 information can be helpful to converse in a social setting with people from varied ethnicities. In
additon
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addition
 to that, living overseas can help
students
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 in their
all round
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development
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.
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 is because when an individual starts living alone, he/she learns various
skills
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 necessary to function as a responsible adult.
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skills
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such
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 as managing finance, cooking or organising
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.
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, the acquisition of these abilities enables the individual to thrive in every aspect of life. In conclusion,
students
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 can face the challenges of isolation or inability to
accustom
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adapt
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 to a new environment
while
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 studying in a different country.
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, the advantages of improved social
skills
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 and complete
development
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 as an individual
is
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are
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 far more beneficial than the disadvantages.

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Task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it as your guide through the essay. Compare both sides with balance, and finish with a strong conclusion that restates your view. Add more specific facts or real examples to back each point.
Coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Use simple link words to show how ideas go with each other. Use full stops and commas well. Check spellings and grammar.
Strength
Clear stance at the start
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Good attempt to plan with paragraphs
Strength
Some linking words are used well
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