Some people believe that with modern technology, there is no longer any need for traditional classroom-based education, and all learning should take place online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays
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many peoples thinks that we should stop teaching in big
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and do everything online because we have internet and
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. I disagree with
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idea.
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I agree that online learning has many good
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.
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Student
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Students
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can watch the video many
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times
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if they
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don't
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Also
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they can study at home and
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don't
need to travel
university
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everyday
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every day
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.
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save
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money and time. My friend
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studies
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online
and
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, and
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she said it is very
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convenient
. During Corona
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coronavirus
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all
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, all
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students
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study
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online. But I think
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lecture
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are
also
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very important. When
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students
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go to
university
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university,
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they can meet other
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student
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students
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and make
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friends
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.
This
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is very important.
Also
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in
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classroom
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the classroom
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, student
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student
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students
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can ask
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to
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the teacher
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if they have
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doubts
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.
Teacher
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The teacher
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can see if
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student
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the student
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understand
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understands
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or not. Online is difficult because maybe
internet
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the internet
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is bad. Another reason is that some
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subjects
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need practical work.
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example
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example,
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science
experiment
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experiments
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or art
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classes
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are better in
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a real
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classroom
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.
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The student
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can see properly.
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Also
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some
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student
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students
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dont
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don't
have good internet at home
so
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, so
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online learning is not fair. In
conclusion
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I think we should use both online and
classroom
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teaching. Online is good
but
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, but
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classroom
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lecture
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lectures
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are still important.
University
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The university
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should not stop
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teaching. Both
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together
is
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are
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best.

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task response
Plan before you write. Put one idea in each paragraph and end with a short wrap up.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go together, like First, Also, But, Finally.
grammar
Try to fix small building errors and use simple word. Check spell and punctuation.
content
You show a view that we can use both online and in class.
content
You give real example, like the time of Corona, to back your point.
structure
You end with a short close that restates your view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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