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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The given charts provide
an
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apply
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information about the
location
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 and
variaties
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variations
 of dance
classes
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 which adolescents are currently participating in a specific town
of
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in
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 Australia. It can be clearly seen that
,
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apply
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 Private studios
is
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are
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 the most
preferrable
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preferred
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location
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 for dance
classes
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which
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, which
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is
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account
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 the almost half of the entire selections.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 Ballet dominates the other dance
classes
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 in under 11,
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however
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however,
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this
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 is less preferred
one
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apply
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by
11
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the 11
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-16 age group. Looking at the details,
Privates
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Private
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 studios hold
the
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48% which shows the most chosen
location
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 in
whole
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the whole
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 range.
Although
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 Ballet
classes
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 have around 600 young
people
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 under 11
which
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, which
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 has the most among the other
classes
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,
interestingly
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interestingly,
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 it has been chosen less by
11
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the 11
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-16 age group. Modern
classes
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 show the same image, having about 500
people
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 under 11-16
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while
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, while
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 roughly 300
people
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 for under 11 age group.
Schools
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Schools'
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 halls have almost 24% which is
the
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nearly one-fourth of
entire
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the entire
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 locations
and
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, and
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 hold the second preferred
location
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  among the other locations. Community hall& other and College-based studios have 18% and 10% respectively. Both
ages
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age
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of
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groups of
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 young
people
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 have nearly 420
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, that
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that
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which
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 is the
almost
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apply
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closer
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closest
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 number for selecting tap
classes
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  that defend
its
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their
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 middle position in the pie chart.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words location, classes, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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