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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Many
individual
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individuals
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 nowadays use some social platform to connect with relatives and friends, others use it to keep up with the latest
news
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. I firmly believed that the benefit of using these social
media
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platform
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platforms
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outweigh
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outweighs
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it's
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its
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drawback
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drawbacks
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. Social
media
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 not only
enable
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enables
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 us to overcome the
geopraphy
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geography
 barrier it
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also
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is also
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 a
tools
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tool
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 to get
news
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 events
immidietaly
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immediately
.
Whittin
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Within
 a
second,
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social
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a social
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 platform can directly send a voice
masessage
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message
 or a text without any fee or payment
which
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, which
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 is a lot
convinient
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convenient
 and as quick as face-to-face communication
, people
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. People
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 do not need to give any force or
wasting
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waste
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 any time
to
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apply
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writing a letter to send off
a
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apply
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daily conversations.
Moreover
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, in some
bussiness
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business
 work, which
require
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requires
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a
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apply
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global cooperation,
it's
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it
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enable
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enables
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stakeholder
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stakeholders
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 to deal with some emergency problems
with
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through
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 several meeting apps.
In addition
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,
hot-
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hot news
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news
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 could be
send
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sent
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immidiately
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immediately
 on social
network
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networks
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 for citizens, which some traditional
news
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 couldn't
as
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do as
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quick
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quickly
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as
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apply
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.
For example
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, in recent
days
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days,
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Vietnamese
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 has
to
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had to
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 deal with
a
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apply
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significant floods that destroyed many
infracsture
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infrastructure
 and housing
,
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.
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with
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On
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 social
media
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 the information
of
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about
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this
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 serious disaster has been rapidly spread to all citizens in
flooding
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the flooding
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aera
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area
,
helps
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helping
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 them to prepare before the flood and stay away from
some
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the
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 flooding zone. On the flip side, social networking has a huge
number
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amount
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 of misinformation and fact-checked
news
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 that can create panic and
misleading to
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mislead
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 citizens,
such
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 as in
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the president
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president
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presidential
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 election or traffic accidents. On the plus side, being addicted to social
media
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 can lead to a significant impact on mental health problems and physical health,
such
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 as
unrealistic
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an unrealistic
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 lifestyle, cyberbullying,
addict
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addiction
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 to brainrot content,
that
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which
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 may cause low self-esteem, traumatic stress and reduce productivity. In conclusion,
while
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 social
media
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 poses a major risk for people,
it's
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its
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 pros still remain stronger and
outweight
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outweigh
cons
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the cons
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. With the
approriate
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appropriate
of
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apply
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time
managetment
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management
 and
select
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selecting
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 the real information, social
media
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enable
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enables
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citizen
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citizens
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a
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to a
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useful tools to research and keep up with the new events

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grammar
Fix bad spell and wrong words so the idea is clear.
coherence
Use words that show how ideas go with each other, like also, but, however.
content
Give more full ideas and longer examples to back up points.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph and a clear topic sentence at start.
structure
End with a short recap that restates your view.
content
The essay gives a clear view that benefits can beat the bad points.
content
There is an example about floods that helps the idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • facilitate
  • geographically separated
  • fostering
  • connectivity
  • instant communication
  • real-time information
  • misinformation
  • rigorous checks and balances
  • fake news
  • addictive nature
  • detract
  • face-to-face interactions
  • mental health
  • awareness of limitations
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