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Young people in wealthy countries often take a 'gap year' between high school and university in order to spend time travelling abroad. This is an excellent way for teenagers to prepare for their future lives. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

Children who live in
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developed
 countries mostly try to take a gap year between high school and college with the intent of spending
time
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 on tourism. Since
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 idea has both positive outcomes and negative results, I would partially agree with the statement. When students want to
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a
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university
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 they have to opt
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major, which is really a very stressful moment
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 they need to have adequate
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 to make
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 decision, since they are choosing their career. Most
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the
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student
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students
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 don't get ample
time
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and
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 they end up
persuing
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 a field
that is
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 not good for them.
Therfore
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Therefore
, if they take a
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 they will have enough
time
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 to figure out what they want to study, and they may not
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regret
when
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it when
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 they finish
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. For
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example
, I graduated from two different universities and studied two majors, because the first
time
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 I did not get that much
time
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 to find out the field that I loved to study, so I chose
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 wrong one, but
then
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 I took a year just to know the one that I am into. I'm convinced that a gap year is not good for some students
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 the fact that they can forget some information
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 they may not understand university courses. There are some
pre-requasite
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prerequisite
 courses that we take in
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high school, so if those
kind
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 of courses slip your mind, you will be lost.

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scope
Make your main view clear in the first line and say it again at the end.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
development
Give one or two more details for each idea so your point is strong.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar mistakes to be understood easily.
language
Use short, simple words and short sentences to keep the meaning.
structure
Add a short ending that restates your view.
strength
The writer shows a real aim to explain why a gap year can help.
strength
A personal example is used to support the idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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