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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some iformation is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both this views and give your own opinion.

Scientific
researches
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research
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are
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 among the most valuable resources globally. It is believed that sharing
researches
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research
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 in
academic
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the academic
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 world should be
free
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free,
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while
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 others disagree with
this
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 point of view because of
their
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its
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 importance. In
this
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 article, I discuss both views and clarify why
in
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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 research achievements should not be shared freely.
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 with, it is a positive development that all members of a society with any socio-economic background have
access
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 to scientific journals to enhance their knowledge in different fields. In
long
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 term,
this
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 trend can lead to inspiration and motivation in people interested in science
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 from
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 group. All members of society should have an equal opportunity to benefit
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this
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 accessibility
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, and
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 it will promote the sense of fairness in science. So, it is likely that free
access
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of
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 scientific journals can be beneficial for
public
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the public
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.
On the other hand
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, lots of scientific experiments need a huge amount of budget to progress. Part of
theses
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 expenditures can be covered by selling their results to
reserachers
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researchers
. Most of
well-known
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 scientific journals
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such
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, such
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 as
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 provide
limit
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access
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 to their content if
are
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they are
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 not
purchused
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purchased
 their articles by researchers.
Moreover
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, all
researches
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research
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 should not be shared through scientific resources since some of these outcomes are confidential
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, and
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 they should be preserved safely.
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, some medical
researches
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research
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 on the animal-experiment stage should not be shared because of their possible abuse by ordinary people. Or even military scientific
researches
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research
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 should be kept secure to prevent threatening
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society.
Therefore
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, it seems that
unlimitted
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unlimited
access
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 to all scientific content could have some negative consequences. In conclusion, in my opinion, it is not necessary that everyone have
access
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 to scientific content because of its possible drawbacks that are mentioned above.
Although
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 people should know the value of the article by paying its
expence
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expense
, some specific
group
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groups
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such
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, such
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 as scientists and university
students
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students,
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 should be
exception
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an exception
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and
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, and
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 some facilities for them should be considered by
authorities
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the authorities
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 to assist in enhancing
the
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apply
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science.

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progress
Plan your answer. Say your view in the first paragraph. Then give two ideas with a small example. End with one short sentence that repeats your view.
coherence
Make the link between ideas clear. Use link words to show order, like first, next, also, finally. Each paragraph should have a topic sentence that shows the main idea.
content
Use more simple facts or examples that fit the topic. Do not add too much new detail in the conclusion.
language
Check language. Spelling and word choice errors can slow the reader. Use plain words and clear grammar.
task response
The essay mentions both sides and has a view.
coherence
It has a clear plan with intro, body and conclusion.
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