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Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Focusing on the current is more vital
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 some oppose
this
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 notion, I personally argue in
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as
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, as
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 there is
no
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not
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 a lot of stress. Some
people
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 think that paying attention
for
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to
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 the
future
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 plays an important role
to achieve
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in achieving
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 their goals. Without
planning
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planning,
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 it will be difficult in their study or personal development.
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, if students do not make plans for their
futures
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futures,
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 it may be challenging for them to achieve their success.
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, financial planning is
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also
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essential
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such
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, such
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 as saving or investing money for the
future
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.
Therefore
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,
future
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 planning gives
people
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 direction for the
future
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.
However
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, for some
people
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focusing
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, focusing
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 on
for
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the
future
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 is unnecessary because it gives
people
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 more pressure. Living with the present allows
people
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 to live
happy
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happily
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 without
any
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apply
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worrying.
For instance
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,
people
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 who live
with
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in
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 the present
they
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apply
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have less stress and
anxious
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anxiety
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. So, life is unpredictable
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, and
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 some events can come unexpected time. If
people
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 make some plans for the
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future
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future,
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it
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they
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 can
be
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apply
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change until the
future
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so
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, so
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live
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they live
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 just in present. In conclusion, focusing on the present
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makes
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 life happier
while
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 planning for the
future
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 has stress.
People
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 may enjoy the present
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, but
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 focusing on the
future
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 is
also
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 good.

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task achievement
State your view clearly in the introduction and keep it in the body to show a clear stance.
coherence
Have one main idea in each paragraph. Do not mix ideas in the same paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, and keep the order easy to follow (plan: intro, 2 or 3 bodies, short end).
task achievement
Give simple examples and explain them to show why your point is true.
content
The essay tries to show both sides and own view.
content
There are some examples to support points.
structure
Attempt to end with a conclusion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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