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Public library will soon no longer be housed in a building as well facilities and books will be available for all to access. What are the advantages and disadvantages of public existing online.

Public
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library
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libraries
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 are
on
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one
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 of the most
power
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powerful
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house
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houses
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 of knowledge, but with the
advance
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advances
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technology
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in technology
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,
it
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they
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 will no longer be available in a house with all
amendments
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the amenities
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, as
it is
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they are being
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 taken over by online
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library
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libraries
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. There are various benefits and drawbacks.
This
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 essay sheds
the
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apply
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light on the positive
sides
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apply
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and negative sides of online
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library
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libraries
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. To commence, earlier we had
big
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a big
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 complex, consisting of
huge
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a huge
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 collection of books, where people travel and go, take membership and pay for the books. It had tremendous prose,
firstly
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,
public
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the public
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 gains
book
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a book
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 at a cheaper rate,
secondly
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, it
enhanced
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enhances
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 the knowledge of the scholars.
On the contrary
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, a reader has to
spear
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spare
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 lots of time to commute, follow
strict
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the strict
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 rules and regulations of
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library
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the library
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, and
then
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only can
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can only
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 enjoy the world of knowledge.
On the other hand
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,
electronic
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an electronic
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 platform
library
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not
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is not
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 only convenient for
reader
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the reader
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, but
also
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,
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apply
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save
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saves
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 enormous time,
finance
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money
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, and hard work behind it.
As a result
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, the number of people joining it are more and more day by day.
However
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, critics
points
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point
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 out that, though one can sit at home and enjoy books,
but
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apply
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it has created isolation, eye
straining
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strain
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,
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apply
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.
Secondly
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, many times
it
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, it
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 is poor people
cannot
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who cannot
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 afford it,
as well as
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 it is quite difficult in
a
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an
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 area where no Wi-Fi or
advance
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advanced
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 technology
accessible
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is accessible
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. In conclusion, public libraries
provides
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provide
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 enjoyment for readers, and
socialization
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socialisation
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 among the senior citizens
,
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;
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nonetheless
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,
E-
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e-libraries
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library
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 are
most
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the most
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 efficient and effective methods , but unknowingly
developing
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develop
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 health issues
,
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apply
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 and social problems
should
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that should
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considered
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be considered
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 as
a
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apply
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main drawbacks.

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structure
Fix form and make a plan for your essay: a short intro, 2 or 3 body parts, and a short end.
development
Make each idea clear. Give a clear point, then an example.
grammar
Use simple and correct word order. Check for grammar and tense.
cohesion
Use more link words to join ideas, like 'in addition', 'however', 'for example'.
task response
Add a true end about what you think is best or final idea.
content
Some ideas are on topic and show you know the issue.
content
You try to compare old and new ways the library can be used.
tone
You have an actual view on the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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