The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012.

The table compares the total amount of electricity produced by Geothermal,Wind,Solar,Hydraulic and Bio-mass from the year 2009 to 2012. The figures are expressed in trillion
watt hours
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, the most striking feature is that
Hydralic
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Hydraulic
stood at the first
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whereas
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solar energy had observed a gradual increase throughout the years.
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with, in 2009, Hydraulic contributed significantly by 3329
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while
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others resulted
less
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then
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280
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, in 2010, the graph for solar
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reported
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increase from 21 to 33.5
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,
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and wind energy measured around 288.9 and 351.2
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respectively
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, in 2011, geothermal had observed a gradual rise
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69.3
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,
Bio-mass
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had increased rapidly by 307.6. During the final year, Hydraulic remained
highest
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the highest
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contributor for
electricty
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electricity
by 3663.4
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geothermal stood at its lowest point by 70.4.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words twh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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