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You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However,thereare many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college.In the letter
· describe the situation
· explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
· say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir: I am a tenant from Flat 3, Building No.2. I am writing to you to complain about the noise made by my roommate
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 I wish you
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 help me find
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a better solution to
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 situation. I have been working for quite a long time
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 I need a good sleep at night to charge my battery.
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, my roommate is a college student
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 who is addicted to playing PC games
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night. What’s more, he just uses the speaker of the computer
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 playing online games, never using headphones
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instead
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, which makes
me
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 hard to fall asleep
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. I have mentioned
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almost 10 times
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 I can not find any improvement
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 the situation. He just
promises
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to
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me that he will use
headphone
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 next time, but nothing
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 happened.
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, I can hardly enjoy a
whole-night
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 sleep for a month
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 I feel bad about my body and
emotion
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. Would you please help me move into a
single-room
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 with no one else? I just want to have a quiet environment in the place I sleep
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 I think only by
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good
sleeping
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. I can afford the higher price compared to
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 room. Thank you all the time
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 I wish your response as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Steve

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structure
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs: intro, problem, and request. Use one main idea per paragraph.
grammar
Improve grammar and choose simpler phrases: 'I have trouble sleeping because of my roommate's game sounds.'
tone
Be polite and formal: use 'could you please' and 'thank you in advance' to keep a respectful tone.
content
Be specific about the impact on work and the expected outcome: 'I need a quiet single room by [date]'.
content
The letter states the purpose clearly and asks for a quiet room.
tone
It uses a formal greeting and closing.
content
The problem is set out and the effect on sleep is described.
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