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Your city library is closing for renorvation for three months Write a short message to your classmete about how you feel and what you will do instead

Dear Muhsin Did you hear that our
library
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 was closed for three months? I am really upset about
this
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 situation because it was the best place for me. I used to go to the
library
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 to read books when I was bored, and the
library
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 helped me
to
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relax. I think we may be bored until the
library
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 is fixed again.
Therefore
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, we should buy books from book stores to read.
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, we still have a chance to read
while
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 the
library
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 is being repaired. Best wishes, Usmonali

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development
Add more detail about how the library closing affects your day and mood.
planning
Give a small plan for what you will do instead, with steps (online reading, borrowing, visiting other places).
cohesion
Use more linking words to connect ideas (and, but, also, therefore).
grammar
Check grammar: use 'get bored' instead of 'be bored'; 'bookstores' is one word.
vocabulary
Use simple but varied words to avoid repeating the same phrases.
tone
Keep a polite tone and finish with a closing line.
strength
Clear purpose and polite tone.
strength
Gives a plan to read while the library is closed.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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