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Band 7

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The given line graph illustrates the
amount
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 of time
that is
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 allocated by four companies to produce cars in the US over a
period
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 of 7 years, commencing from 1989.
Overall
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,
although
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 all factories experienced fluctuations over a
period
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, General
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Motor
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Motors
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 continued to fall over the
period
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, General
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Motor
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Motors
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, which dedicated 32 hours to manufacturing per car, was the highest
amount
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 among others.
However
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, it declined dramatically to finish at 22. In sharp contrast to
this
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, the Ford company began 28,
then
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 it increased and exceeded that of General
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Motor
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Motors
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 in 1999. After that, it peaked at 31 in 2001, suddenly
just
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 like General
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Motors
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Motor
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Motor,
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 followed the declining trend to record well under 22 in 2005. The
amount
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 of time spent by both Hona and Toyota was 22. There were opposite trends for both to record the same
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, just as their initial levels. Apart from a brief rise from 2001 to 2002, they went down to finish at 20.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, period, motor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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