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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table illustrates details about the
metro
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 system in different regions.
Overall
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,
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the
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New York City
subway
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 leads the race in the number of
lines
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 and the total length,
while
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Beijing
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the Beijing
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subway
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 surpasses other cities in terms of annual journeys.
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, the cost of
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a
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single ticket
in
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on
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 the
London
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Tube
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 is the highest compared to other cities. In detail, 24
lines
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 are present in
in
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the New York City
subway
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, surpassing
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the
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Beijing
subway
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, Paris
metro
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, Tokyo
subway
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 and Mexico City
metro
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 with 19, 16, 13 and 12
lines
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, respectively. →
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 the
London
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Tube
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 takes the
last
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 place with only 11
lines
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.
Furthermore
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, New York takes the first place in total length as well
with
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, with
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 659 miles, followed by Beijing
subway
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 and
London
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Tube
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 at 357 and 249,
while
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 Paris
metro
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 is at the bottom with only 127 miles.
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, the annual journeys in Beijing are the biggest share with 3.6 billion, higher by 0.5 billion compared to Tokyo
subway
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,
whereas
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 the other proportions vary between 1.2 and 1.65 billion.
Also
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,
according to
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 the given information, the cost of a single ticket in the
London
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Tube
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 is the most expensive one, fixed at $7.30,
while
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 the price in other cities varies between $0.23 and $2.5.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, subway, lines, london, tube with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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