The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The maps provide key information about the changes that have taken place at the waterfront
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from its establishment in 2009 to 2014.
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, it is clear from the maps that the
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has undergone substantial redevelopment, with several features either replaced or destroyed.
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, the 2009 layout had a big swimming pool on both sides,
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the current layout has many trees around the
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, and stands out for a clear shift and a diversified map.
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what is shown, in 2009, there is an industrial
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and a lake beside it located in the central part, and there are two swimming pools adjacent to the lake.
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, there is a fishing
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that lies in the right corner,
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another industrial
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in the middle. In terms of the current layout, the industrial
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was destroyed to swimming pool. A new harbour was constructed next to the sea, and there is a school beside the centre. They
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built a university adjacent to the residential
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