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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular specises of plant and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental probems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Environmental issues have been debated in recent years.
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 some people believe that the extinction of specific
species
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 of
animals
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 and
plants
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 is essential, others
orgue
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 that there are more important environmental issues. First of all, there are public genuine concerns about special
species
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 of
animals
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 and
plants
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becase
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because
, in recent years, a significant number of
animals
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 and
plants
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are
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have been
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destroied
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destroyed
 in manmade
disaster
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disasters
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 and natural
disaster
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disasters
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which
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, which
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 was a catastrophe. to be more precise, it has
potential
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the potential
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 to
leads
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lead
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 to
dying
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the dying
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 out of
animals
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 and
plants
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.
For example
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, in
recent
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a recent
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 fire in the US, many
species
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 were extinct and a large part of its forest
burned
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was burned
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.
Secondly
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, there are
others
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other
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 important
issue
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issues
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 like
golbal
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global
 warming,
flood
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floods
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, and
asid
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acid
 rain which are
extrimly
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extremely
 effective on environmental problems. In fact, they are a
base
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basis
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to
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for
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extinction
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the extinction
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 of specific
species
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. For
instence
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instance
,
golbal
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global
 warming can melt
ice
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polar ice
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polar-caps
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which
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, which
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 is
determental
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detrimental
 for polar bears,
increas
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increase
 world
temprture
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temperature
which
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, which
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 can lead to
flood
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floods
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. And
flood
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a flood
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 can destroy
everythings
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everything
. And deforestation or
dengerd
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endangered
animals
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,
plants
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. In conclusion, in my opinion, both
of
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apply
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views are important
and
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, and
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 the
goverments
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governments
 and people are in charge
to reduce
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of reducing
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 environmental problems, and
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the protction
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protction
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protection
 of natural resources, like forests
in
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, in
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 order to conservation of
animals
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 and
plans
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plants
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.

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weakness
Your essay tries to show both sides and your own view, but the ideas are not clear and the writing has many errors. Make a clear plan with a main idea in one sentence (thesis).
grammar
Fix grammar and spelling to make sense. Watch for verb form, noun number, and word order.
vocabulary
Use simple, exact words. Correct misspellings like golbal, destroied, and expast words that are unclear.
structure
Use one clear plan: intro with thesis, 2 body parts for each view, then a short conclusion with your view. Use topic sentences to start each paragraph.
development
Give one or two good examples for each view and relate them to the point you make. This helps your idea to be clear.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides and to give your view.
structure
Signal words show an effort to structure the text (First of all, Secondly, In conclusion).
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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