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The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie graph displays the
production
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 of
electricity
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 in Ireland
and
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, and
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 the table illustrates the main causes for using
electricity
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 in
this
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 country. Overview, coal is the highest
electricity
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production
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 in Ireland
and
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, and
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 gas has significant proportions. Heating is the biggest
percantegs
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percentage
 of
consuming
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apply
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electricity
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, but
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consumption, but
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 phone charging is the
smallest
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lowest
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rates
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rate
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 for using
electricity
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.
Firstly
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, the largest
number
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amount
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 of
electricity
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production
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produced
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 is
coal
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from coal
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, which is 45%. The proportion of gas is approximately 35%.
Furthermore
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, wind and solar
contains
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contain
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similar
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a similar
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number
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amount
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 of
electricity
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production
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are
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is
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the least
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less
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 than others. The rates are 10%.
Secondly
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, heating is
the
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a
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 significant reason
to consume
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for consuming
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electricity
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 in Ireland. The proportion
are
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is
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 slightly above 50%. Lightening ‘s percentage is estimated to
20
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be 20
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. The fraction of kitchen appliances is nearly 15%.
Furthermore
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, consumer electronics and phone charging are the least popular in
using
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terms of
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electricity
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 ; which are 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy
  • efficiency
  • environmental impact
  • residential sector
  • industrial sector
  • commercial sector
  • trends
  • changes over time
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