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The given table shows the number of international visitors arrivals came to nine different countries and the percentage changes between 2009 and 2010.

The table illustrates the number of tourists in nine nations —
France
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, the US, Spain, the UK, Italy, Turkey, China,
Germany
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 and
Hong
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Kong
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 — and the proportion changes from 2009 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that all countries except
France
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 and
Hong
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Kong
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 showed upward trends.
France
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 was the only nation that remained unchanged,
while
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Hong
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Kong
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 was the only one that declined In 2009,
France
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 had the highest visitors with 76
million
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, and
this
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 figure stayed unchanged in 2010. The US started with 66
million
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, rising slightly to 67
million
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 in 2010(+1.5%).
Similarly
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, Spain, the UK and Italy
also
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 increased to one to two
million
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, but with different percentages of change(1.8%, 3.6% and 2.3%).
On the other hand
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, countries with the most proportion change were Turkey, China,
Germany
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 and
Hong
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Kong
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,
although
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Hong
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Kong
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 was the only one that declined to 11%, from 10 to 9
million
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 tourists.
In contrast
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,
Germany
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 approximately doubled from 11 to 23(+109%).Turkey and China ,
as well as
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Germany
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, saw a dramatic rise from 22 to 34 and 33 to 45(+55% and +33%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, germany, hong, kong, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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