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You plan to do some traveling in a few months. You would like to visit an old friend who lives in another country. You haven’t spoken to this friend in a few years. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Provide a short update about your life since you saw him/her last - Explain why you will be traveling to his/her city - Say what you would like to do when you visit his/her city

Dear Ali, I hope
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 letter finds you in good spirits.
it
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It
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 has been 7 years
I
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. I
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have missed you. I'm writing to
informe
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inform
 you of my upcoming travel to your city, which is a unique opportunity to see each other again. Currently, I manage my own pharmacy in Sahand. I
also
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marriaged
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married
 5 years ago, and I have a child,
which
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 name is Sam.
I and my wife
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My wife and I
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 have planned to engage in a short trip to your city, since it has
outstanding
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an outstanding
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 environment, providing a relaxing escape from the hustle and bustle of daily life.
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, the city presents a wide range of sea
recreationals
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recreational
, which
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activities, which
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 are suitable for families. I would appreciate it if you could join us with your family, as it
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is a
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remarkable chance to review
our
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 delightful and memorable moments we had during university. Thank you for your
considration
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consideration
 and time. I hope
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 trip will help us reach each other again. Please feel free
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 if you can't join us. Best regards, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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structure
Try to keep one idea in each paragraph and link them with small links.
grammar
Fix nuts of grammar and choice of words, like 'inform'->'tell', 'marriaged'->'married', 'I and my wife'->'My wife and I'.
vocabulary
Use short, plain words and short sentences so the meaning is clear.
structure
Use a polite opening and a clear closing to make the letters feel warm and easy to read.
tone
Warm tone at the start and a kind wish to meet.
content
Gives the why of the trip and the plan to spend time.
invitation
Asks friend to join and keeps a polite close.
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